sir, bahut achhi kavita ban gai, likhte waqt thik se padha nahi jaa raha tha, ab ek sath padhne par iske arth kee gahraai tak sahaj pahuncha jaa sakta, bahut badhai aur shubhkamnayen.
Dear Rakesh ji if you deleat last four lines it becomes a beautiful kavita complete in all respects. this poem ends on TUM TAK
sir, bahut achhi kavita ban gai, likhte waqt thik se padha nahi jaa raha tha, ab ek sath padhne par iske arth kee gahraai tak sahaj pahuncha jaa sakta, bahut badhai aur shubhkamnayen.
ReplyDeleteDear Rakesh ji if you deleat last four lines it becomes a beautiful kavita complete in all respects. this poem ends on TUM TAK
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